Wednesday 9 March 2016

Acid rain process, IELTS TASK 1, band 6.5

The diagram illustrates the acid rain process that has caused pollution in the environment and in the food chain. Generally, the polluters produce harmful gaseous gases that rise and form polluted clouds. Eventually the clouds release acid rain and pollute the environment.

The harmful gaseous gases are released from three main areas which are housing, factories, and power stations and also from vehicles used in everywhere. The smoke produced by the polluters contains carbon dioxide, sulphur dioxide, nitrogen dioxide, mercury and other dangerous substances. These compounds go up and collectively form polluted clouds.

The polluted clouds then travel across the states and regions and release its contents wherever they stop. It is concerning that they are contained with toxic chemicals that are highly malicious to plants, animals and humans.

As the acid rain is poured pours on earth it poisoning poisons the plants and water reservoir reservoirs like rivers and lakes. Eventually, the pollutants enter the food chain  and as the polluted plants and water are consumed by animals and humans, causing they are affected with severe health effects on them problems.



            Evaluation Report
Word count
167
Comments
The overview in this report contains appropriately chosen information. The key features have been identified and illustrated in a logical way. Paragraphing of the report is fine. However, there are some mistakes related to grammar and sentence structures. Overall, the report can be improved further.
Estimated Band Score
 6.5
 Suggestions
1.      Pay a little more attention to grammar and improve sentence structures.
2.      Always proofread the task response after finishing it.
3.      Keep practicing to improve your performance.
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