free internet access, IELTS TASK 2, Band 6.5

The internet has become vital to everyone in this world, though, some believe that free internet access should not be allowed and instead they require advise a subscription fee for the access just like any other services.

Personally, I believe that free internet access should be given worldwide so that everyone can enjoy its great advantages. Restricting internet access means that only those who are affluent can afford the subscription and deny thousands of opportunities to those who are not. For instance, we need the internet to look and apply for jobs, scholarships and places in higher education and most important to raise funds for those who need. Given that, then those who cannot afford the internet subscription could would not have the chance to compete with the rest of the world.

Moreover, providing internet access to everyone also means that everyone has the chance to grasp all the knowledge and information offer available on the internet. This contributes to greater education, encouraging intellectual development and creativity of individuals.  For instance, many talented individuals are recognized through the internet as they publish their works online and if they are lucky good enough the works get viral, encouraging more people to follow the suit.This is virtually a free exercise so anyone from any corner of the world can showcase his prowess

However, unlimited access to the internet also has a major drawbacks on social development. Although we can learn many thing on the internet but it also comes with great negative influences. If minors for instance surf the internet without supervision, they might accidently explore on violent and porn websites. Consequently, these fine minds turns could turn into vicious and problematic individuals.

By and large, I believe that free internet access gives equal chance for to everyone to compete in this modern world. Tthough, unlimited internet access may influence young minds to be troublemakers, producing ruined generations but this can be minimized through parental supervision.

	Evaluation Report
Word count	290
Comments	All the parts of the task have been covered. The ideas are presented coherently.  Paragraphing of the essay is fine. The range of vocabulary is good. Even though there are many errors in grammar and sentence structures, they don’t make the meaning much harder to understand. However, some ideas can be developed further. Overall, the essay can be further improved.
Estimated Band Score	6.5
Suggestions	1.      Revise grammar and improve sentence structures. 2.      Learn more vocabulary and improve choice of words. 3.      Read sample essays from our website. 4.      Avoid writing more than 280 words. This will help in saving time and reducing mistakes. 5.      Always proofread the task response after finishing it. 6.      Keep practicing to improve your performance.