land degradation IELTS TASK 1

The pie chart and the table illustrate illustrates the  causes of land degradation in 1990s by globally and the table shows the proportions of land degradation regionally in the 1990s.. Overall, it shows that  there were are three main factors of land degradation which were are over-grazing, over-cultivation and deforestation.

Globally, about 90% of land degradation was is caused by these three main factors. The highest proportion of land degradation was is caused by over-grazing at 35%, followed by deforestation at 30% and over-cultivation at 28%. The other factors on the other hand, contributed only about 7% of the total degradation.

The table indicates causes of land degradation in three regions in the 1990s.. The highest total degradation was recorded by Europe (23%), followed by Oceania (13%) and the least total degradation was marked in North America (5%).

Compared to other regions, Europe had the highest land degradation caused by deforestation at 9.8% and over-cultivation and over-grazing at 7.7% and 5.5% respectively. While, Oceania had the highest percentage of land degraded by over-grazing at 11.3%, followed by deforestation at 1.7%, however, there was no impact of over-cultivation in Oceania.. North America on the other hand, recorded lowest percentage 3.3%, 1.5% and 0.2% of land degradation in all the causes listed. due to over-cultivation, over-grazing and deforestation respectively.

	Evaluation Report
Word count	166
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Estimated Band Score	6.0
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