losing our traditions, IELTS TASK 2, band 6.5/7

The advent of technology has revolutionized many aspects of our life not least including our traditions. Many people believe that we are losing our traditions to technology. Contrarily On the contrary, I believe that with the right approach, technology can be used to for retaining our traditions.

There are a lot of traditions that long have been forgotten including in our traditional cuisine, costumes, crafts and values. I believe that younger generations seem to ignore these traditions because they are not well introduced with these values. Thus, by using the internet for instance these values can be reintroduced and be promoted religiously on a large scale. New generations can learn effectively about our tradition if more information about them are is published online. More afford efforts should be carried out to trace wherever the local tradition is still being practiced and present them out to the world via this technology by uploading pictures, blogs, videos etc. on websites such as the Youtube, Facebook, Twitter etc.

Besides that, we can also use technology to enhance our traditional products. For instance, with the aid of technology certain traditional costumes, crafts, cuisines can be massively produced. These traditional items can be recreated and reproduced with modern sophisticated machines with simply efficiently and with a minimum of fuss. This will attract more people to learn and love traditional stuffs.

Moreover, by incorporating traditional values with technology we can enhance our creativity as varieties of new products can then be produced. For example, many new fashion designs are integrated with traditional values like in Malaysia, fashion designers use ‘batik’, a traditional malay cloth in their design. This is somehow a way of retaining tradition in modern style.

By and large, I believe that traditional values will still be appreciated if we can use technology to take them to another level.

	Evaluation Report
Word count	275
Comments	All the parts of the task have been covered. The ideas are presented coherently. Paragraphing of the essay is fine. The range of vocabulary is adequate for the requirements of the task response. There are a few errors in word choice and grammar but overall, the response is still easy enough to understand.
Estimated Band Score	6.5 or 7.0
Suggestions	1.      Revise grammar and improve sentence structures. 2.      Learn more vocabulary and improve choice of words. 3.      Always proofread the task response after finishing it.