The chart represents the percentage of the cinema’s viewers
by age for over 18-year period from 1984 to 2002. It can be clearly seen that
the age group of 15-24 was the most frequent cinema attenders.
Looking at the details, all the age groups saw a rise in
people attending the cinema but fluctuated over the period. The age group 35
and over had the least passion to watch cinema, steadily increasing to only 10%
viewers in 1997 and reached nearly 20% at the end of the period.
On the other hand, the medium
attenders were the age groups under 14 and 25-34 the figure for which were approximately identical with both wildly fluctuated and had
plugged in a couple of times. In spite of some fluctuations, the
figures for those in the age groups of under 14 and 25-34 increased from 10%
and 5% in 1984 to around 38% and 35% in 2002 respectively. The most
common attenders cinema viewers were of the
age group 15-24 who started with about 15% and steadily inclined, increased, it fluctuated for the last two-quarter
and reached a peak at 60% in 2000 before it fell and reached a plateau at 50% in 2001.
Overall, all the age groups had developed interest to watch
cinema with
the . The age groups of 15-24,
under 14, 25-34 and 35 and over had maintained their position over the 18-year
period as the first, second, third and fourth place respectively.
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Evaluation
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Word count
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196
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Comments
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The overview
in this report contains appropriately chosen information. The key features
have been identified and illustrated in a logical way. Paragraphing of the
report is fine. However, there are some mistakes related to grammar and
sentence structures. Overall, the report can be improved further.
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Estimated Band Score
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6.5
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Suggestions
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1. Pay
a little more attention to grammar and improve sentence structures.
2. Replace
long sentences with shorter ones.
3. Observe
the graph carefully and respond accordingly.
4. Always
proofread the task response after finishing it.
5. Keep
practicing to improve your performance.
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