reducing medicine costs, IELTS TASK 2

In this globalization era, many countries  are competing  with each other toward modernization, live in advance  to develop technologies and to live luxurious lifestyles, though in many part parts of the world there are some who  are still left behind  and could not catch up with the rest of the world. They live in devastated countries,  and many are unemployed, live in hunger poverty and unimaginably poor conditions. Many have died die everyday due to common diseases left untreated as the medicine costs  are more than what they could afford.  This has urged the Therefore, many people think drug companies  should be obliged to lower their price and help this nation those underdeveloped.

I strongly believe this initiative will help thousands of lives. The willingness of drug companies to cut off or down reduce their products’ price would definitely make a huge difference. Though this should not be a burden on drug companies alone, other organization organizations, either government, non-government or world alliances should subsidy subsidize the medicine price too. These  This kind of support will encourage the drug companies to join the venture wholeheartedly and contribute consistently in sense of humanity and responsibility.

Moreover, these investments will not lose go in vain. The drug companies will mutually get benefit as these will promote their brands and products. People around the world will get inspired by their kindness and thus interested to buy their product products believing that they  are partially contributing to those who  are in need. This is a genius advertisement strategy especially if the products proven provide effective to cure  to diseases and safe save many lives. This will gain costumers trust and give the companies good reputation as the best drug manufacturers.

All in all, distributing medicines with at lower price to those who in need gives has a lot of good impacts on the drug companies but others should also join this good act and give their full support so that the effort can be sustained for a lifetime period.

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