Salary increase, IELTS TASK 2

Directors of large companies often receive much bigger salary increases than ordinary workers. Employers’ organization say that in a global market this is necessary to attract best management talent.

What are your view?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

People always envy the job of directors as they are paid with a huge sum of salaries and they are also eligible for higher salary increase than other ordinary staffs staff members. Some contend that, this is rather unfair but the employers think this is vital to encourage their directors’ best management talen.

From my point of view, salary increase should be parallel between the directors and other workers. First of all, these general workers worth deserve such appreciation as they are the workforces that generate the production of the companies and thus the contribute to companies’ incomes. As without Without their energy and hard work nothing could be achieved by any magnificent company not no matter how great their directors are. These workforces deserve better treatment from their companies as their absence can collapse the whole institution, as in India many companies bear big lost losses due to strike of workers.

Moreover, the directors which who are already well-paid are living in fortune, but those general workers and laborers are not. Some are living in unimaginably poor conditions, taking other part-time jobs just to get by meet their everyday life necessity. It seems all their hard work for their companies are is just not enough as their salary does not meet their life requirements. The companies should acknowledge their workers’ welfare and thus pay them more for their long hours of hard work and difficulty.

All in all, not only the directors worth deserve salary increment but other workers too as they are the main asset of the companies and more importantly their welfare they are much less fortunate than those at higher position.

	Evaluation Report
Word count	258
Comments	All parts of the task are covered. The ideas have been presented coherently; it is evident that the writer progresses from one idea to another. Paragraphing is fine. However, there are several errors pertaining to grammar and word choice. Overall, the essay can be improved further.
Estimated Band Score	6.5
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