The charts represent the ethnic composition of Brazil and
Cuba in 2008. As
clearly be seen It can be clearly seen that the
White white ethnic dominating group dominated both
countries.
Looking at the details, both countries were composed of three major
ethnics of which both had similar ranking from the most populated to the least.
As in both Both countries had White,
Mulatto, and Black people as the most, next and third populated
ethnics respectively.
Other point to note is that Brazil had 2% of other ethnics,
while Cuba did not have other ethnics beside the three major ethnics. Other
than that, Cuba recorded much higher percentage of White and Black ethnics
compared to Brazil of which werewhich had 65% of White and
10% of Black people in Cuba and 53% of White whites and 6% of Black blacks in Brazil.
However, Brazil recorded higher rateproportion of Mulatto ethnic from mullatoes
than that of the same ethnic group in Cuba
of which were representing 39% and 25%
respectively.
Overall, we
could see that both had similar proportion of three major ethnics
and the difference was that Brazil had other ethnics whereas Cuba had not.
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Evaluation
Report
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Word count
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169
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Comments
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The
candidate has analyzed the pie charts well. An effort to compare and contrast
the main features is visible. Paragraphing of the report is fine. However,
there are many mistakes related to grammar and sentence structures. In
addition, choice of words could have been better at some places. Overall, the
report needs further improvements.
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Estimated Band Score
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6.0
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Suggestions
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