The bar charts show the rate of gross domestic product (GDP)
spent on education in 2005 and overall GDP growth in 2008. Four Asian countries
were included of which Mongolia had the highest GDP spent on education (5%) and
also had the highest GDP growth (8%) on the following year in 2005 and 2008 respectively.
Looking at the details, Mongolia had the highest rate in both
charts, while Thailand was the next highest in GDP spent on education (4.2%)
but was the third in overall GDP (3.6%) which shifted places
with . The proportion of GDP spent on education in Nepal which was the third
(3.4%) and the it was placed second in the rate of GDP growth (5%) respectively.
What is more, the figure for Khazakhstan had remained as the least rate on both charts. As can
be seen Kazahstan saw a huge gaps from Mongolia, as in in Kazakhstan, the GDP spent on education of about 3% less and double up the gap of about 6% in was 2.30% in 2005 and the GDP growth
rate
] was 3% in 2008.
All in all, we can conclude that the fastest GDP growth rate was in Mongolia, while
Kazakhstan had the least growth.
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Evaluation
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Word count
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164
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Comments
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The overview
in this report contains appropriately chosen information. The key features
have been identified and illustrated in a logical way. Paragraphing of the
report is fine. However, there are some mistakes related to grammar and
sentence structures. Overall, the report can be improved further.
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Estimated Band Score
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6.0
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Suggestions
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