cultural understanding, IELTS TASK 2, band 6.5

Many people believe that global crisis occurs due to lack of cultural understanding. However, there are several measures that can be taken to gain better cultural comprehension among people worldwide.

I believe that, the most significant way to bridge the gap of conception among us is via tourism. Instead of travelling for fun and leisure, people around the world should be encouraged to also travel to learn about the host countries’ cultures, practices and believes beliefs and at the same time sharing  share theirs with the locals. Exchanging such knowledge will definitely increase communication and build better relationship among us, and thus bringing better impression about each other.

More than that, the host countries should also provide expert tour guides that who can really explain and describe about the unique values that the locals hold. A solid  Solid information about the locals like a book or simply a nice pamphlet briefly describing about the locals’ customs will also help the tourist to digest the info information better. Some cultural performances should attract more tourists to come and enlighten them with some differences that the locals hold.

Other than that, student exchange programs may also alleviate help in gaining better understanding. For instance, if more students exchange globally for at least one month, then this will give better chance for more students to go abroad and mingle with others from different parts of the world. This will then educate more people worldwide about each other, spreading the knowledge and soon more people will have their wrong perspectives enlighten develop a greater tolerance towards others from different backgrounds.

All in all, all these measures might increase our understanding about each other and hoping that these will reduce our misconception about other cultures, believes  beliefs and customs. 

	Evaluation Report
Word count	276
Comments	All parts of the task are covered. The ideas have been presented coherently; it is evident that the writer progresses from one idea to another. Paragraphing of the essay is fine. The range of vocabulary is sufficient here. However, there are several errors in grammar and word choice. Overall, the essay can be improved further.
Estimated Band Score	6.5
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