space exploration. IELTS TASK 2

Nowadays, space exploration has become among the most famous field but also the costly one. Annually, the business spends thousands billionsof dollars or more are spent especially for on research and development proposes. Though Therefore, many agreed agree that this huge expenditure is such a waste when we are facing vast world issues like war, poverty, global warming and many more to be addressed. They content contend that this budget should be allocated to solve these problems instead.

I strongly agree with this contention as I think space exploration consumed consumes too much money when many still suffered suffer from various problems and really need this budget desperately. What is more, I really think that before we explore outside the earth we should first sustain what is inside it. In the name of humanity and responsibility we should priories support those who really are in need, or addressed any address earth issues than something that is not that urgent. Space exploration can wait when thousands are dying every day. The world is too busy making a great achievements when the greatest things we can do is to sustain lives on earth.

In addition, the space exploration do does not contribute to make life convenience[ieltsblog16] convenient or better. It is not like we are escaping the earth that we desperately need to explore the space and if we have to one day it is because we do not care about it today. My point is that we have to care about of the earth before it is ruined and space exploration would not contribute to that.

All in all, space exploration can wait and the spending should be applied to sustain the earth. As if all is well then When all major problems are addressed, only then space exploration should be considered or. However we can spend some for the money on this field but do should not ignore other world issues that urgently need to be settled.

	Evaluation Report
Word count	298
Comments	An effort to accomplish the task is visible. The ideas have been presented coherently; it is evident that the writer progresses from one idea to another. Paragraphing is fine. However, there are many errors in grammar and word choice. Moreover, some sentences could have been written in a better way. Overall, the essay needs to be improved further.
Estimated Band Score	6.0
Suggestions	1.      Revise grammar and improve sentences. 2.      Learn more vocabulary and improve choice of words. 3.      Keep practicing to improve your performance.

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