should consumerism be promoted in society? IELTS task 2

Economic growth of any country is very much depends dependent on consumerism of its citizens. Unfortunately, consumerism has so much many social consequences on society. Thus, should consumerism be promoted for the sake of economic well-being or should it nor for the society development not is a topic of heated debate.

From my point of view, consumerism should be promoted in balance a balanced way such that both well-being are under cared . For economic sense for example, consumerism contributes among to country’s main income due to taxation charges on all products in markets. Subsequently, this gross income is vitally used for country’s developments including subsidizesing citizens’ certain needs like education, petrol and allocatesing budget for those who need. In turn, stable economy can sustain citizens’ needs, rights and developments, which makes a good equilibrium that good economy equal to means good care of citizen’s well-being.

On the other hand, over consumerism by society has so much many drawbacks as it promotes materialistic society that tends to spend money unnecessarily. Consumerism is set as common and trendy, which encourages people to hold debts. Overused of credit cards for instance, causes many people to get trapped in financial problems. Some even have been declared bankrupt due to unpaid collective debts. This kind of society will eventually effect affect the economy as many lose their consumerism power and thus effect this affects the country’s income. Thus again, it is about balancing maintaining the equilibrium, as now loss of consumerism equals to loss of economy.

All in all, consumerism is rather vital for economyic growth but still over consumerism could slowly kill the society. Thus, balanced consumerism should be promoted so that equilibrium effects could be achieved for the sake of both sides.

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