The graph compares the percentage of New Zealand pupils
studying a second language of French, Spanish, Japanese, Chinese, German and
others by language acquisition between 2006 and 2014. Overall, all the language learned saw a fluctuateting trend with and French
classes had the highest number
of students over the period. while However, Chinese classes had the least number of students but it only lasted until 2011
before the figure strived and competed with others.
Over the 8 years, French and Spanish classes saw a stable fluctuating range of 28-32% and 20-28% students respectively. On
the other hand, Chinese was the only language classes that saw an upward trend. The
figure for Chinese started at about 4% in
2006, and remained the same until it skyrocketed in 2011 and tripled to 12% at
the end of the chart.
On the opposite, Japanese and German classes saw a downward
trend of which the former started at 30%, which was the second highest at that
time and then steadily declined
and hit at 18% in 2014. While However, the later, marked a doubled decrease from about 14% in 2006 to 7%
in 2014.Other countries (others) saw a rise and reached its highest
peak in 2013 (15%) before its sudden fall to only 7% in 2014.
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Evaluation
Report
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Word count
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200
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Comments
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The overview in this report contains
appropriately chosen information. The key features have been identified and
illustrated in a logical way. Paragraphing of the report is fine. However,
there are some mistakes related to grammar and sentence structures. Overall,
the report can be improved further.
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Estimated Band Score
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6.0 or 6.5
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Suggestions
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1. Pay
a little more attention to grammar and improve sentence structures.
2. Replace
long sentences with shorter ones.
3. Always
proofread the task response after finishing it.
4. Keep
practicing to improve your performance.
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