the increasing of world's population size - IELTS task 2 band 6.5

The increasing of world’s size population is believed to be unsustainable and will lead to global crisis. Others believe it will guarantee economic and social growth.

I believe if the world’s population keeps growing, the world’s demands will greatly exceed their supplies. The supplies of world’s commodities, houses, households and other human’s needs will soon be insufficient to meet the world’s demands. The available jobs and places for higher education will also be scarce, increasing vast employment and education competitions and consequently many will find themselves  having lack of education, jobless jobs and homeless   homes. This will lead to severe social problems such as crimes and poverty and thus devastated conditions as a whole.

On the other hand, due to fear of getting over population  overpopulated some developed worlds countries have introduced extreme birth control like limiting three children per marriage. If the same trend applies is applied globally then the world will face a shortage of work forces. As smaller family size promises better education and thus better future careers for the upcoming generations, as a results, we will be  have lack of general laborers to work on our food, build our houses, buildings and do other general labor works. The shortage of man power to work on providing our us with basis needs and thus on our world’s development will consequently affect our economic and social growth. More It is concerning when an ever-busier lifestyle of modern societies makes them prefer to be childless and this contributes to even more shrinking size of population.

Based on to this these arguments, I believe world’s population size should be allowed to continue growing but should be controlled such that it is not overflowing or shrinking in number but just enough to balance the world’s demands and supplies.

	Evaluation Report
Word count	284
Comments	The candidate’s effort to accomplish the task response is visible. The information is presented coherently; it is evident that the writer progresses from one idea to another. However, there are some errors in grammar. Overall, the essay can be improved further.
Estimated Band Score	6.5
Suggestions	1.      Revise grammar. 2.      Always proofread the task response after finishing it. 3.      Keep practicing to improve your performance.
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