environmental offender-IELTS task 2, mistakes spotted

Due to prolong damage done on to the earth, now it has to suffer to some extent. In order to save the earth, it has to stay green or get greener but environmental offenders seem do not do not seem to care about the policies and keep destroying the environments. Severe punishments should be charged on given to these offenders so that they know their limits.

The rules and regulations related to environmental concern have long been released, though the number of  environmental offenders still climb each and every year climbing year by year. This proofs proves that the rules are not effective and not being effectively followed, the rules mean nothing. Thus, I believe severe punishments and huge compound will definitely open everybody eyes not ever prevent people from breaking the rules and stay within boundaries permitted. Only then, the earth will be a better place to live has brighter opportunities to keep away from these culprits.

 The second point is these culprits are usually among highly executive companies which means small charges bare nothing on them. They can easily get away by paying their compound and the very next day planning they plan to work on even bigger project that highly unconcern of affects environmental well-being. Moreover, they are sometimes have political bonding which gives them more power to exploit the nature as they pleased and with big cash on in their hand, they are prone likely to bribe the officers in charge and can easily flee escape from their crime. To deal with big power, rigorous assessments, strict and delicate regulations with severe punishments should be executed and only then the government may eliminate these types of criminals.

In conclusion, environmental offenders can easily escape from their crime and repeat commit it again and again, and so only severe charges punishments may can make them stick to the rules.

	Evaluation Report
Word count	272
Comments	The candidate has tried giving some relevant arguments. An effort to elaborate the main ideas with supporting points is visible. Paragraphing of the essay is fine. However, the number of mistakes in the essay is considerable. Most of the mistakes pertain to word choice, grammar and sentence structures. Overall, the essay needs further improvements.
Estimated Band Score	5.5
Suggestions	1.      Revise grammar and improve sentence structures. 2.      Learn more vocabulary and improve choice of words. 3.      Develop the points clearly and precisely. 4.      Keep practicing to improve your performance.

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