changing in eating habit and lifestyles of children, IELTS task 2, band 6.5

In many countries, the eating habits and lifestyles of children are different from those of previous generations. Some people say this has had a negative effects on their health.

To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

In this modern era, we have much changed since decades ago  changed much compared to previous decades. Our kids today do not play and eat like we did when we were kids. We have gradually transformed our kid’s eating habits and lifestyles which some contend that this is a bad change and significantly have has shown effecting affecting their health.

I am strongly agree with this contention, this transition is definitely unhealthy and worrying. First of all , considering our eating habits, back then we did not eat as much as fast food like we do now as they are much abundant now. The fast food offers a lot of calories, fat, sugar, additives, preservatives and others harm other harmful ingredients, puts putting a higher risk of getting diabetes, heart attack, stroke and other health issues. In contrary, in the past, we always prepared fresh ingredients for our homemade food which are guaranteed to be safe and healthy.

On the other hand, the kids nowadays are too engaging engaged with gadgets and technology. At a very young age, they are introduced to playing with tablet and smartphone including babies and toddlers. This has produced a very unproductive kids who rather sit home whole day long with their gadget. Contrarily, in the past as a kids we loved to climb tree, run, swim, and play a lot of fun outdoor and traditional games. This explains the obesity problems among young kids nowadays, as they tend to sit and eat whole day with mere less physical activities which can lead to more health problems.

All in all, we can conclude that, we have introduced a doom lifestyle to our kids just to make them busy from disturbing us, when the fact it is our responsible  responsibility to be with them, to play and to make a real bonding and connection with them. We should change this trend and give our kids second chance to explore the real world.

	Evaluation Report
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Estimated Band Score	6.5
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