The charts represent labour employment by sector in Thailand and Japan in 2005. As clearly
Looking at the details, Thailand which had the biggest
proportion
of labour force in agriculture (42.3%) was also
closely followed by services (37.10%) and industry (20.30%), which made quite a
close gap between the three sectors. In contrary, in Japan, service sector dominating dominated the chart by about 70% left, leaving only 28% for industry and 4.5% for
agriculture.
As can be noted, a huge difference between Thailand and Japan
is that Thailand had the biggest proportion of labour force in
agriculture but Japan had only under 5% for the that sector. However, both had almost similar proportion of employment for
industry of which
about 20% to 30%.
All in all, the employment in Japan and Thailand was very
much contradictory, as in
Japan services sector was dominating the job sector, while in Thailand
different sectors spread more evenly.
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Evaluation
Report
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Word count
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153
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Comments
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The overview
in this report contains appropriately chosen information. The key features
have been identified and illustrated in a logical way. Paragraphing of the
report is fine. However, there are some mistakes related to grammar and
sentence structures. Overall, the report can be improved further.
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Estimated Band Score
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6.0 or 6.5
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Suggestions
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1. Pay
a little more attention to grammar and improve sentence structures.
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proofread the task response after finishing it.
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