traffic congestion IELTS task 2, mistakes spotted

There are too many vehicles on the roads and that causes heavy traffic congestion. On verge of  To resolve this issue, many have suggested reducing  the use of private cars usage and alternate to using public transports means of transport instead. This essay will address few keys present some measures to encourage people doing to do so.

The first key First, we need is to study why people are very unlikely to use using public transports. Looking at its service, it is simply a nightmare for many of us. Public transports is always delay late and off schedule causing people lagging behind in their business and  to be late for work. The full and crowded  and limited space in the couch causes some people to be breathless, encourages picked pocket and some even experienced being molested  encouraging the crimes such as pick pocketing and molestation.

The second key is by upgrading Secondly, public transports transport needs to be upgraded. If we would want people to leave their own cars, we have to provide them with the convenient and comfortable means of transportation then we have to provide the same standard or much better than they are used to. For instance, increase  by increasing the number of public transports we can reduce the crowd, faster the pace, offer fast service and make it more punctual and thus provide easy and comfortable travelling ways.

The last key is to reduce ticket prices Last but not least, ticket prices should be reduced. Of all the convenient public transports might provide, it would not become people choice if its cost is the same or even higher than that of using private cars . It almost is obvious that people using use public transports to save more money and thus cheaper ticket prices would definitely attract more people using to use public transports.

To conclude, people are very likely to take public transports if it offers good better services with cheaper costs than that of private vehicles.

	Evaluation Report
Word count	286
Comments	The candidate has tried giving some arguments. An effort to elaborate the main ideas with supporting points is visible. However, the number of mistakes in the essay is considerable. Most of the mistakes pertain to sentences that are either erroneous or inadequately developed. As a result, they cause difficulty while reading the text. Overall, the essay needs further improvements.
Estimated Band Score	4.5
Suggestions	1.      Revise grammar and improve sentence structures. 2.      Learn more vocabulary and improve choice of words. 3.      Be careful of spelling errors. 4.      Develop the points clearly and precisely. 5.      Read sample essays from our website. 6.      Keep practicing to improve your performance.

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